This one made me smile, despite whatever reaction it was in fact meant to produce. There was a hint of psychotic predisposition that added to the sorrow it carried, and the image of that set off a sort of cackle in my mind. Of course, aside from psychosis, you did really well to make it more of a realization than an obsession.
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Very nicely done!
At first I was afraid I wouldn't like the switch in length in the lines
but after reading it again, I absolutely love it. Brilliant. And yes, I can tell this is old... It has your old feel to it. It's nice.
This was very beautiful...
Hmm... I do often wonder about the insides of mouths as well
That.was.beautiful.
I loved this poem - the images and the way you descriped your feelings, the way they ran so equally with mine and everyone else's experiences...it was perfect. I've always loved your writing, but still, it never fails to blow me away.
Sorry, there's nothing constructive from me, again.....
aaaaahhhh....the old Brad is back...I loved it. a lot. I know what you mean I think we all like jack when we see his pic. I loved the part,
I wonder if I would ever know what the
insides of your mouth felt like. "
It's gorgeous...I think that al the time w/ the guy i like...wow. I just loved the whole thing.
Did/Does Brad have a crush on Jack?